The Journey of Fey

A lone Oak tree stood tall and proud in the center of a large stretch of farmland as far as the eyes could see. The air was hot and humid almost to stifiling for the farmers to go out and check there crops. They flitted in and out of the crops checking to make sure they were growing well. They all were worried about the crops because it was the middle of the summer and there had been so little rain. None were aware of a lone girl that sat on a large branch of the oak tree her long legs swinging in front of her as she looked over the land with her dark green eyes. Her long blonde hair castcaded behind her reaching almost to the middle of her calf. She wore a short light green summer dress with no straps. She sighed as she watched the humans flit around the crops like the worker bee's that resided in her tree. Her hand slowly ran over the bark of the tree as it seemed to wripple under touch like a pleased cat being pet. She watched the humans until the sun began to set and they all left returning to there villige out of sight. The girl ran her hand over the tree one more time before jumping from her branch. She took a dark cloak from a lower branch of the tree and pulled it over her shoulders. She tied the two strings in the front and pulled the hood over her head hiding her hair and face. She bid one more fair well to her dear tree and started toward the village.

(Just the begining of my story review and tell me if you wish me to continue.)

I like it.More please

Ohhh, very nice Aura And welcome back

Mkay, interesting prologue.

1: When writing a story, if you include author's notes, (A/N) you do not write parenthesis. Instead, you include a line break (or what's closest to one you could use, like a simple hyphen) and, this is optional, add write "A/N:" and add your note.

2: For the overview, I will include lines from the story.

A lone Oak tree stood tall and proud in the center of a large stretch of farmland as far as the eyes could see.

"Oak" here is not a name, thus, it shan't be capitalised. The phrase is "as far as the eye could see", by the way.

The air was hot and humid almost to stifiling for the farmers to go out and check there crops. They flitted in and out of the crops checking to make sure they were growing well.

Comma after humid, and "stifling" is spelt incorrectly. The wrong "to" is used, as "too" should be there, as in "he's much too strong for me to overcome alone." After crops, a comma ought to be there.

They all were worried about the crops because it was the middle of the summer and there had been so little rain.

Sentence here is okay.

None were aware of a lone girl that sat on a large branch of the oak tree her long legs swinging in front of her as she looked over the land with her dark green eyes.

Comma after tree. Obvious protagonist here, and of course, a girl. Because it's always female.

Her long blonde hair castcaded behind her reaching almost to the middle of her calf.

Cascade, not castcade. Comma after her, and calves rather than calf. You don't have just one of those... unless you lost your leg.

She wore a short light green summer dress with no straps.

Mhm. This here is okay.

She sighed as she watched the humans flit around the crops like the worker bee's that resided in her tree.

Why "humans"? Is she an alien or animal...? But she just got a human-like description! And bees, not bee's. Bee's is possessive. And why is she in a tree with bees in it?

Her hand slowly ran over the bark of the tree as it seemed to wripple under touch like a pleased cat being pet.

...wripple? What.

She watched the humans until the sun began to set and they all left returning to there villige out of sight.

..again with the humans. People would have been better, or better yet, farmers. And village.

The girl ran her hand over the tree one more time before jumping from her branch.

No comment.

She took a dark cloak from a lower branch of the tree and pulled it over her shoulders.

I wonder where that cloak came from? How did no one even notice it if it was hanging around on a tree? Otherwise, decent. ...But vague.

She tied the two strings in the front and pulled the hood over her head hiding her hair and face.

Comma after head, please. And why does she even need a cloak? Is she a criminal or something? Why is there no reason stated?

She bid one more fair well to her dear tree and started toward the village.

Farewell, not fair well. And if you knew how to spell "village", why didn't you go back to the misspelt sentence and fix it?

And if you want to continue, that is your decision, not mine. But I would like you to continue, as there are so many open ends, and sorry if I was abrasive in any way.

Awe leave her alone Tanuki.I would have done the same thing.No one is perfect and it's not like it's out publicly.

I wasn't picking on her, though. xP Pointing out mistakes in spelling and grammar is more useful than a comment about how awesome a story is or how author must continue. Those are useless comments. After all, shouldn't a writer seek improvement? Despite it being abrasive to bluntly point out "you spelled this and that incorrectly" or "you need more substance," it's still better than saying "Good job! I want you to continue!" It's the author's choice to continue. And shouldn't a writer want to improve?

If I were picking on Aura's writing, I would just say "This is horrible/mediocre." Instead, I point out errors.

Perhaps I could have worded it... er... kindlier. But blunt I wouldn't really... uh... be all nice and sweet about someone's errors. Note of writing: REVIEW, REVIEW, REVIEW. Check for spelling errors before you press that submit button. That is all, chaps.

Another random useless note: Ego-stroking is bad. Horrible. Way worse than pointing out errors.